What the hell? Why are you reading this still? Its been about a year since the last chapter... Any who!
**Chapter 5: The death of A loved one**
As Jak, Ratchet and their sidekicks flew silently down and nobody spoke. As they came closer Ratchet spoke up Why did we leave Qwark behind?
Clank replied almost straight away he would have just slowed us down.
When they landed Jak looked around and quietly mumbled to himself. Its quiet
To quiet
Suddenly a Dark maker mech similar to the one Jak piloted in the Dark maker ship Came out of the rocks and started shooting.
Daxter started screaming and running around, while Jak ran straight into battle. Ratchet looked at Clank and nodded. Clank Transformed into a shiny, large launcher which Ratchet picked up and started aiming.
Jak Ran out of ammo so he threw the gun away and in an amazing light show he morphed into the Dark persona we know today. He ran at the dark maker and started to shred it to pieces.
After a few moments the Dark maker laughed. Youre just feeding me you fool! And with that Jak jumped out of the way and a trigger happy Lombax shot the rocket that was formerly Clank.
The dark maker trembled and collapsed. They all gathered around it and Clank Changed. Take the Eco Jak! Daxter told him.
Jak reached in and grabbed it. As he did it lit up and turned into dust. Thats never happened before. Jak claimed.
Daxter started walking back. Jak
Look up please.
When he did he saw a large Dark maker. But instead of purple-black it was a purple-gray. Jak was surprised at this because he had encountered every type of eco there is, and he had never seen this. Jak closed his eyes and thought of light Jak
**Meanwhile**
On the Dark maker ship stood a tall robot with an egg shaped head. He stared into a monitor as the Twilight eco Dark makers Tore around Haven and Veldin. After Zexx had given him the technology and the substances the evil Doctor Nefarious had created a bright purplish gray liquid which was thick and slushy. He had made it the new life source for selected Dark makers (Who were honored to be used as a test subject for Zexx).
The Behemoth Life forms became larger, stronger, faster and last but not least
Invulnerable.
**Back with the heroes**
Jak, take the left side Ill take the right. Well corner it then well have the advantage. Ratchet ordered. Jak nodded and ran around the left, still shooting his peace maker.
While the heroes were planning to ambush the monster a swarm of Twilight scorpions came around behind the Hellcat and disabled it. (And be disabled I mean destroyed it from the inside.)
Clank turned around and saw them. Straight away he turned into the mighty Alpha Clank!
Alpha Clank was an upgrade Clank had made after he had seen a similar model in Dread zone.
Clank picked up a boulder and threw it at the scorpions. They used their sharp Tails and blew the rock into a thousand little pebbles.
Over the other side of the forest behind some trees Jak and Ratchet were fighting the Dark maker. It was hopeless. All their damage was just absorbed be the armor. It threw its arm in a swinging action and slammed Jak into a tree and winced slightly. Ratchet ran over and checked if he was alright. At that exact moment almost as if it was in slow motion, the Dark maker wrapped it hand around Ratchets head and squeezed.
It looked like a watermelon. Maybe even a tomato. It just crushed in its hand. No! Jak screamed. He reached over grabbed the dark maker and threw him over a ravine and it disappeared over the other side.
Jak half crying half screaming dragged himself to Ratchets limp body as about twenty more dark makers surrounded him. It was the end. Jaks feeble attempts to stop them were gone when a Dark maker knocked him unconscious and one dragged him to the ship where Daxter and Clank were waiting chained up. Daxter closed his eyes tightly and Clank kept watching as they dragged Ratchet and Jak slowly up the ramp and into the cockpit. The sound of the ship was muffled as the wind blew through the trees making a sort of whistling sound. They were defeated. All hope was lost. The war was certain to be lost without them. Maybe some rebellions will gather. But none will stand victorious.
Well thats it
Sort of
I will continue in the next couple of days if you liked it. Please comment and read please! I dont own Jak, Ratchet or any of their associates.














Comments
Nice bit of exposition, although you could have avoided it by dragging out th fight longer, then making it apparent it was effectively invulnerable (while also avoiding actually saying it is, because then you could have had it beaten at a later date by something else)
All in all quite good. Not perfect, but then nothing is...
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Children becomes an adolescents when they realise adults aren't perfect.
Adolescents become adults when they realise they aren't perfect.
Adults become wise when the learn to forgive imperfection.
I guess I'm an adult then
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It's Dancing Time!
Perhaps it's the flow of blood and the adrenaline comedown that helps.
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Children becomes an adolescents when they realise adults aren't perfect.
Adolescents become adults when they realise they aren't perfect.
Adults become wise when the learn to forgive imperfection.
I guess I'm an adult then
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